tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post8549215595691078000..comments2024-01-24T11:41:28.022+00:00Comments on A Cuban In London: Dawn (a short story)A Cuban In Londonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16423293358605007539noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-59616217982752093032012-06-20T22:58:51.430+01:002012-06-20T22:58:51.430+01:00Many thanks for your wonderful comments. They '...Many thanks for your wonderful comments. They 're very welcomed.<br /><br />Greetings from London.A Cuban In Londonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16423293358605007539noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-84146552684191964712012-06-20T21:32:27.952+01:002012-06-20T21:32:27.952+01:00Congratulations on being published! I can see why....Congratulations on being published! I can see why. That's a beautiful image of eyes kissing but not more. The feeling of longing and unrequited love is intense. I do hope you keep writing more stories.<br /><br />If you want a suggestion, maybe work some descriptive prose into the dialogue so we know who is talking without changing fonts. It would flow better if the two, exposition and dialogue, were more integrated. But of course that is a choice of style.Sarah Laurencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00423008641739156182noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-67342973177601575362012-06-18T09:54:07.853+01:002012-06-18T09:54:07.853+01:00This resonated so strongly with me because I had a...This resonated so strongly with me because I had a friend whose wife did leave him specifically because he had a brain tumour. He died a year or so ago. Your beautifully written story brought the issues back to life.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-82742686842617775972012-06-17T13:23:59.478+01:002012-06-17T13:23:59.478+01:00It's a beautiful piece and I'm not surpris...It's a beautiful piece and I'm not surprised it was published. You should submit much more work and even write a book you are such a good writer.tinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17415302577518111227noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-29252424766495435552012-06-17T12:52:32.320+01:002012-06-17T12:52:32.320+01:00Thanks for the kind words Mario, and hope it's...Thanks for the kind words Mario, and hope it's the start of a fiction-writing strand to your career!<br /><br />HelenaHelenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01819797707146644238noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1165773290907101242.post-58104783939165260432012-06-17T11:39:11.076+01:002012-06-17T11:39:11.076+01:00It so happens that, after a fitful night, I am up ...It so happens that, after a fitful night, I am up at dawn and reading your story. Dawn has promise, usually. Just how that promise plays out is not like the movies. Your characters are caught in a poignant moment in which they are not even sure what they would like that promise to be. In this, they are stand-ins for most of us, who commonly have to make decisions on impartial data and conflicted feelings. Congratulations on creating a story with such depth of both feeling and thought. Double congratulations for having gotten it published.Judith Mercadohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13739476600999112092noreply@blogger.com